Ok so here's the first installment. It all starts a little slow as I got to meet people and is told in 3rd person. I thought about changing names but I might as well just let it fly. It gets funnier and crazier by the day
Mis-adventures at the Halfway House
A Creede Chronical
Once I decided to move I knew it would be a totally different experience. After quitting my job and going to
I knew that taking time off work as an American was as close to un-American in the post 9-11 landscape as could be. But the service industry is one of the few markets that has remained strong in
Halfway House
The house where I was to live in Creede was $175 a month and there lived 6 other service industry employees. I am no stranger to cheap accommodation after spending 2 months living with my ex-girlfriend in a camper van and numerous similar situations of living in 600 square feet or less in the past several years. My previous living experiences included massive flying roaches, filth, meth dealer neighbors, and numerous floods both sewage and otherwise. The frat house had to be the most disgusting, and so I knew I would be able to “handle it”. What I didn’t know was that I was to step into a new world. I would be living in the “Halfway House”. What I quickly learned is that at least half of my co-housemates were on probation and currently trying to steer clear of the law’s eye, while hiding out in one of the most notorious trailers in the town. Proof positive of this point was that one day before I was to move in a search warrant was served at the house; not for the current residents, but due to a previous resident who had hidden stolen property in the room directly next to the one in which I would live. This was going to be an adventure.
5 Comments:
fuck yes!
Perhaps you meant to say "first person" instead of "third" (hence your use of I's and me's), but I would encourage you to indeed put it in the 3rd, even "extreme 3rd person", avoiding the use of pronouns as much as possible. For instance, take a look at this little passage:
Nick's previous living experiences included massive flying roaches, filth, meth dealer neighbors, and numerous floods both sewage and otherwise. The frat house had to be the most disgusting, and so Nick knew he would be able to “handle it”. What Nick didn’t know was that he was to step into a new world. Nick would be living in the “Halfway House”
jesus,
I've been out of school for too long. the next few installments get really good. I'm going to have to edit some of this.
This is reaaaalll good, Nick. Keep it going. I'm waiting to see what happens.
wow. this is fuggin awesome.
nick, yer a helluva writer.
lookin forward to more of yer 'ventures in creede.
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